Yernar Assignment 6 Tutor report form

Overall Comments

Your third film shows progression from the first two. As a series of three you have produced an empathetic body of work that does justice to your subject matter. Your essay contextualises your practical work more than satisfactorily and develops arguments around the representation of disabled people, engaging with history, contemporary practice and theory.

Assessment potential

Assignment 2 and 4 Assessment potential

I understand your aim is to go for the Photography/Creative Arts* Degree and that you plan to submit your work for assessment at the end of this course. From the work you have shown in this assignment, providing you commit yourself to the course, I believe you have the potential to pass at assessment. In order to meet all the assessment criteria, there are certain areas you will need to focus on, which I will outline in my feedback.

Feedback on assignment

Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity

Notes from, and in addition to, our Skype tutorial –

I felt this was a successful film. As before, the narrative moved on at a pace we expect to see, in all aspects it feels professional and broadcast quality without losing the essential intimacy. It did not ‘feel’ longer than previous films. It developed Yernar’s character and the final sequence where he speaks directly to us is very powerful after the groundwork has been laid out. I’d noted some minor moments where the caption repeats over two frames – as you pointed out this is because the caption is linked to the vocal. I don’t think its really a problem at all. We did discuss the repetition of the same client that Yernar speaks to – in stills and moving image – at the start, I felt it interrupted the flow when he ‘reappeared’. But again this is really minor! Overall, really good work, well done.

For the assessment you plan to send a hard copy of written work, we discussed ringbinding this. Regarding the prints (taking feedback from assessors into account) we discussed these as being screenshots, as this is how films are presented on paper and we want to emphasise your main assessable work is the photofilms. If possible you will aim to present these prints in a slim box.

The films will be uploaded as per OCA instructions.

Discussing your research essay, I found very little to query and still less to argue with. The depth is apparent from the bibliography, the engagement with research on disability through recent history and in contemporary culture. Your citing of Stuart Hall, for example, illustrates how difference and othering is not confined to those with disabilities. You chart a line through the history of photographic representation. You successfully bring in contemporary practice from wider cultural representations and tie in your personal concerns as well as the specifics of the situation in Kazakhstan. It is well written, with a clear structure and referencing. I suggest keeping all the queried text highlighted in red.


Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity

The new images and film, are of excellent quality. Each film works as narrative, is successful as documentary and is a strong piece of advocacy.


reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

The strength of your research is evidenced in your films. The essay is exceptional in its scope and contextualisation.

Learning Log

reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

As always, coherent, thoughtful writing and analysis.

Suggested reading/viewing



Pointers for the next assignment / assessment

Its been a pleasure to share this journey with you. I feel you should seriously consider MA study.

Tutor name Les Monaghan
Date 30/11/16
Next assignment due N/a

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