Adilzhan Assignment 5 Tutor report form

Overall Comments

Really pleased to see this second finished film. Again a fitting piece of work that does justice to your subject.

Assessment potential

Assignment 2 and 4 Assessment potential

I understand your aim is to go for the Photography/Creative Arts* Degree and that you plan to submit your work for assessment at the end of this course. From the work you have shown in this assignment, providing you commit yourself to the course, I believe you have the potential to pass at assessment. In order to meet all the assessment criteria, there are certain areas you will need to focus on, which I will outline in my feedback.

Feedback on assignment

Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity

Notes from, and in addition to, our Skype tutorial –

I think this is very successful film. Again the narrative moved on at a pace we expect. There were noticeable moments where the image coincided with text, but also plenty of ‘space’ to read the texts, view the images, listen to Adilzhan and generally lose oneself in the film. Well done. It looks deceptively simple and that is, I know down to a lot of hard work.

I suggested having a look at Pete Mansell’s work. Particularly –

But also

For the assessment you plan to send a hard copy of written work which will include prints, we discussed how these should be presented, as your main assessable work will be the photofilms.

We settled on prints that are screenshots of strongest images with subtitles, especially the most poignant ones.

Your formula is moving on each time, developing as we view each film. You have avoided created repeated films with different characters. They are guided by the interviews, so Dinara spoke about what was important to her as does Adilzhan. This is important as you are allowing their stories to be told (and of course they have much in common) rather than enforcing your own polemic.

The poignancy in Adilzhan’s film, is in his own voice, when he is looking backwards he quotes his mum, in the present he focuses on his strengths, and in looking to the future he links to the past also. As in Dinara’s film you have encompassed the sweep of someone’s life this time through their words alone.

Again this shows your evident skill at interviewing – and you could only use half!

I am looking forward to reading your research.


Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity

There are new images, and again are of good quality, used to good effect in your storytelling. Once more we see an affinity and warmth between you and subjects, Adilzhan comes across as a great character. We discussed how you have got decent shots from very unpromising situations, I noted the background in the shot of Adilzhan putting his shoes on.


reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

I believe the strength of your research is evidenced by the seamlessness of the finished work.

Learning Log

reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

As always, coherent, thoughtful writing and analysis. I was happy with all the queried text highlighted in red. I think it is useful to show where you’ve had doubts, rather than a slab of text that points to a process built solely on correct decisions and success – making work isn’t like that!

Suggested reading/viewing


We’ve scheduled our final tutorial to discuss written texts and ideas.

Pointers for the next assignment / assessment

I’m happy to try to combine reviewing the final, one or two, films and your texts. Check through your research notes, that you have sent all that you want feedback on, plus your bibliographies.

Tutor name Les Monaghan
Date 27/09/16
Next assignment due 25/11/16

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